The animation certainly was fluid I can appreciate what you were going for but it's nothing spectacular nor funny.
The animation certainly was fluid I can appreciate what you were going for but it's nothing spectacular nor funny.
I'm confused on what the story is and the animation title doesn't show. I assume it is supposed to say ice cream man? That being said I guess the animation is fine. I guess I just don't get it because I've never hated, loved, nor really followed any of his works.
This isn't bad per say. I like the unique animation style you used.
But your delivery for the punchline is lackluster. There's no buildup to the joke and the animation doesn't convey anything funny to makeup for that.
The animation is fine and the timing of the sound effects and jokes are well done.
The only critique I have is that your delivery could have more energy to it. I mean since you are telling a story you may as well put some emotion into it since it seems like you are just saying words with no tone. It's a story! Exaggerate! I know you used sound effects to convey you freaking out but you could have set it up first.
EDIT: As I said the animation is fine. I'm talking about your script/delivery of the lines.
Thank you for the feedback
just to let you know the reason why i'm not that good is because I'm only 2 months through with animating
The style definitely gives me newgrounds vibes. The first screech at 0:08 was a bit fast, you literally just needed half a second more for the audience to register the sound.
Speaking of sound the quality of it fluctuates suddenly going from low quality sound to high quality sound at 0:19 when the guy with the sword drops in. This takes away the attention of the audience because now they have to adapt to the new sound instead of paying attention to the scene.
If the sound was fixed and you fine tuned some of the jokes timing this would be 5 stars.
I don't know about that. You only have so much energy to spend for others. And people still need to pull their own weight. By that I mean the "help me help you" kind of deal. And if they don't change their mentality that's on them. Because some people don't want to change-which is fine. But if you stick with them their negative energy is going to rub off on you.
And maybe there isn't a way to solve their problems-at least not in a timely manner. You still need time to cope. Some people I tried helping gave up on themselves and I can't be pulling their weight for them. That's not my job. I help because I want to help-even if they need it I don't have to help if I don't want to. Sadly there are more important things than helping others and as I said some people don't want to change.
With all that said the animation is alright. It gets the message across but has nothing mindblowing to make it stand out from any other simple animation.
The animation certainly is fluid. The transitions are seemless and the way the ball changes ways it travels is pretty creative.
Thank you brother This is just one last test I took because I have an idea to make an animation called Quartz Girl and Diamond Boy.
It works. The character design really stands out. Other than chaos I don't really see much happening though. What are the people doing in the silhouette?
They are having a nice picnic in the middle of the road :^)
I like the designs. And it is overall a pretty cute animation to go with the music. The background really reflects the simplicity of the animation and the animatic style at 0:27 really brings a great contrast to the beginning. Not to mention you have some high quality designs like 0:33.
Since the transitions are so smooth and you obviously did try implementing a more simple art style with a more complex one along with the pretty fluid animation I would give this 4 stars.
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